BTS Revenge Page183-4 Redraft

Original version and my working redraft.

Even though I had the page practically finished, them walking away and then coming back just felt too choppy so I'm moving things around to keep it one conversation.

I stilll need to iron out the dialogue so the draft page will likely be changed significantly but it gives you an idea of where I'm going with it.

The plan is to add in a couple more pages to the confrontation, cass not trying to step in more also felt out of character so that's an aspect I'm working on, + some extra shaming to showcase just how far lex has come.

Thanks for your patience! ?






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